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Did you look towards the stars tonight?
Did you see your life passing by?
You dwell on the past
And focus on what has come before,
Never giving us a fighting chance
To be happy and free.
If only you could see
I still love you and want you by my side
Until the stars fall from the sky
And the sun\'s light fades from sight.
My possible pleasure
Is your potential pain.
It\'s a chance you can\'t take,
Plans you wont make,
A heart you couldn\'t break,
Too worried you\'ll make a mistake.
For better or worse, you\'ve found your fate.
It seems that our love cannot be,
But I\'ll still love you,
Eternally.
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By: April E. Jones (Silver Kitsune)
Did you see your life passing by?
You dwell on the past
And focus on what has come before,
Never giving us a fighting chance
To be happy and free.
If only you could see
I still love you and want you by my side
Until the stars fall from the sky
And the sun\'s light fades from sight.
My possible pleasure
Is your potential pain.
It\'s a chance you can\'t take,
Plans you wont make,
A heart you couldn\'t break,
Too worried you\'ll make a mistake.
For better or worse, you\'ve found your fate.
It seems that our love cannot be,
But I\'ll still love you,
Eternally.
-----
By: April E. Jones (Silver Kitsune)
Loving someone who can't love you in return either due to fear of hurting you or having other obligations can create a lot of painful emotions that build up over time. It can seem like they don't care enough to acknowledge your feelings, or as though they're intentionally trying to hurt you, even though you know they're not. And even though it hurts, and at times you may want to wring their neck, you still love them.
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hmmmm
wow, the imagery seems like it would be a bit cliche, but you pulled it off amazingly. the words flow into each other almost perfectly. love can be a harsh thing, and it seems i hav a pattern of commenting on poems that have to do with it this morning, that cant be a good sign. ne ways the only thing i disliked about the poem was the repating rhyming of 'ake' in this stanza(s)
"It's a chance you can't take,
Plans you wont make,
A heart you couldn't break,
Too worried you'll make a mistake.
For better or worse, you've found your fate." it doesnt fit in with the rest of the flow, you used the rhyme 1 or 2 many times. cut ony of the rhymes, and you could improve the flow of the whole poem. but still, this is a great poem, mad props
wow, the imagery seems like it would be a bit cliche, but you pulled it off amazingly. the words flow into each other almost perfectly. love can be a harsh thing, and it seems i hav a pattern of commenting on poems that have to do with it this morning, that cant be a good sign. ne ways the only thing i disliked about the poem was the repating rhyming of 'ake' in this stanza(s)
"It's a chance you can't take,
Plans you wont make,
A heart you couldn't break,
Too worried you'll make a mistake.
For better or worse, you've found your fate." it doesnt fit in with the rest of the flow, you used the rhyme 1 or 2 many times. cut ony of the rhymes, and you could improve the flow of the whole poem. but still, this is a great poem, mad props